MyWiki:WikiProject Architecture/Peer review/Toma T. Socolescu

Toma T. Socolescu

I have written the English version of this article.

I am the author of the French version.

However, my level of English is not as good as it should for this kind of publication. I there need help to improve the level of English of the text.

Thank you! --Cbrajon (talk) 10:47, 14 December 2009 (UTC)

I've read through the article, it's obviously well researched. I'm happy to do a copy edit in order to improve the English. However, I do have some comments that may help you improve it prior to me doing that:

1. The LEAD section at the beginning of the article should be able to act as a summary of the important aspects and should be able to stand alone as a concise overview. In this case you could write a few short paragraphs.
2. There are couple of unreferenced paragraphs at the beginning of the article. Certainly I think that the sentence in the Biography stating he is still considered should have a reference.
3. consider changing the sections with bullet points into plain paragraphs as the text will be easier to read. Refer to the Manual of Style for help MOS
4. improve the wikilinks: there is no need to link a word several times in a section, for example, Ploieşti.
5. Non-English sources: in the legacy section the quotation extract written in French is maybe not helpful to English language readers, it could be that you provide a translation in the footnotes if you think that it is important. There is some guidance at Non English Sources
6. external links: try and reduce the number of external links, especially those that point to sites that English readers can't understand.

Kenchikuben (talk) 16:01, 7 April 2010 (UTC)